Monday, June 11, 2012

ORDINARY

Pin pricks of light
ordinary in day; dawn
with beauty in dark.

Written for Haiku Heights 

32 comments:

  1. I could picture a forest at dawn with the first rays of light breaching the leafy canopy. those light rays which later in the day are unnoticed as they blend with the other rays :)

    beautiful haiku. one of the best I've seen from you.

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    1. That is exactly the picture i imagined while writing this Leo! woah, seems to me you are turning a mind-reader ;)
      i am so glad my haiku reached to you so well :)

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    1. thanks Rahul :) and a haiku needs to be short and simple!! :D

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  3. I have seriously started to love your haiku now :) Ever since you wrote the one about blue ink, you've been getting better and better and better.
    Love this!

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    1. yay! :D (because you love my haiku by now :P)
      and seriously yaar, that blue one is my favorite till now.
      and thank you! :D

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  4. I agree on what Leo said, really a best and extraordinary!

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  5. Definitely not an ordinary haiku :0 makes me imagine a beautiful picture of it :) lovely!

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    1. Thank you Maharukh. glad it painted the image i wanted :)

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  6. This is what I call a picture..without a picture..a true haiku..creating the picture in readers mind..well done...God bless!!

    RS:)

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    1. Thank you Ramesh Ji!! i am so glad you like it!! :D

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  7. Thank God for Leo for that comment!!! Or else I was completely lost!

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    1. LOL :P no matter DS, but its a pity you dont get my poems!

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    1. Thank you Panchali Di! good to see you here! :)

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  9. It takes open eyes to see familiar things in new ways.

    Ordinary Day

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    1. So true MMT... so true... thanks for the visit! :)

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  10. I dont know much about Haiku but that was simple and beautiful indeed!

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  11. lovely Haiku...loved the last line...superbly written... :) :) :)

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  12. Lovely dawn images ~ Nice one ~

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    1. Glad you liked it Grace. good to have you back on my blog :)

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  13. Concept was brilliant. Loved it. But wonder what is that 'dawn' doing there. It seems to be introduced just to maintain the syllable count.

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    1. dawn as in the importance of a ordinary prick of light dawning upon me... actually i wanted to use some other word, but yeah, had to keep in with the syllable count.
      glad you liked it TF!!

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